Up the garden path

A neatly gardened path,

picket-fenced and flower-bedded,

guarded and weeded,

pristinely waiting

for a special caretaker…

She knew not when

it became over-grown

and narrowed to an under-belly alley,

thoroughfare for pedestrian plants

and she was no more Lily White

but Easy Daisy,

commingling with all

from Poison Ivy to Wireweed Wily,

soiled, man-ured, sun-dried stretch

of wonderful wasteland,

loosened and labelled ‘top soil tasted,

tested, toasted and tossed’;

Walk by and stop by,

she might have you too,

the double-turned gypsy-ground.

But don’t walk over and away,

she has faced that much too much,

poor deflowered Bettina.

p.s: Written for Trifecta Week Thirty-One Challenge which asks for 33-333 word entries based on the theme ‘alley’ (having the meaning-a narrow street; especially : a thoroughfare through the middle of a block giving access to the rear of lots or buildings ). Do check out the entries at http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2012/06/trifecta-week-thirty-one.html

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14 Responses to Up the garden path

  1. Ahh so good! I love all of the symbolism and the word puns like man-ured, and the alliteration of “tested, toasted and tossed.”
    This is really good and poignant at the same time

  2. Annabelle says:

    I love the shift in the images, and the phrase “wonderful wasteland.” Nicely done.

  3. Beautifully written… I love the way you have used your words and how you have brought them together to give us a feeling of mutual understanding. It feels as if we have been through this before and now that you have put those events in words, it is a bit more acceptable. Good work.

    And, thanks for commenting on my blog 🙂 Have a great week ahead.

  4. jannatwrites says:

    Your descriptions are so good! I want to buy this flower and give her a weeded and watered garden where she can be lily-white again 🙂

  5. k~ says:

    Rich in figurative language, ripe enough for the alleyway to consume.

  6. well done, you crafted the words perfectly. Thanks for sharing!

  7. Trifecta says:

    Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. This lovely little piece is packed full of metaphor and careful language. I, too, enjoyed your choice of words and the way you played with them. Thanks for sharing such a strong piece with us.

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